Days
Living in Minnesota
Minneapolis, location
yeah
Dupont street
feel like I was beat
back in the days
past time
in school
being who, I don't know
naughty, skippy, well don't participate
things changed
familiar matters
Brooklyn Park, location
yeah
Girard street
feel like I was eaten
in school
being who, now I know
better, slippy, well participate
adaptation occurred
education matters
Questions
1. What are your thoughts about my poem?
2. Isn't optional, understandable, and have a meaning sense of it?
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3 comments:
I liked it as a whole, especially how you, in a way, reused lines but with other verbs and adjectives to show the change from one to the other. You need to watch your capitilizations, though, unless you are making a point with them. Also you might want to add some punctuation.
really good poem. It has an up beat feel to it. It seems clear to me but who knows maybe i interpreted it wrong !
i enjoyed your poem. i liked the strong beat i felt from it. it's a little hard for me to understand what it's about, but i still thought it was good.
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